Date: Mon, 27 Jun 2011 15:10:03 -0700 (PDT) From: Dean Pender Subject: Rituals of Flesh RITUALS OF FLESH a pornographic screenplay by P.T. Dean (aka prettydean82) This is a work of primarily visual fiction that is intended as an example of a much better porn film. If you are interested in what the hell I mean when I say that, you should watch the documentary "Inside Deep Throat". If you have the resources to put this into practice, I'd love to see the final product. Or even get to have a conversation with you about it during production. I'm not a film-maker, but I like good films and just about every bit of porn I'm seeing is cheap, awful crap that makes me cringe. Here's something a bit different. Note: If you like my style, find my complete novel "Symbiota Sapiens" in the sci-fi section here on Nifty. You should probably search the page for it - I wrote it like four years ago or so. Any comments, email me at prettydean82@yahoo.com ------------------------------------------------------------ and now...our feature production ------------------------------------------------------------ Cast: Took - young as is legal, dark eyes/skin, somewhat rough features, very boyish, "twink" archetype, no body hair, just a little bit of pubic hair, very thick curly hair on head Loki - young as is legal, a bit lighter than Took, delicate features, a somewhat feminine boy, also "twink" archetype, no body hair, no pubic hair, very long straight hair down at least to the waist Archon - early 20's, a very graceful athletic frame, long hair to the shoulders, delicate features, clearly a man not a boy - but only recently so, no body hair, has happy trail down to thick but small bush, think "Legolas" archetype only not blonde Araphis - early 30's, powerful lean bodybuilder/warrior body, preferably with an 8-pack that is visible from a distance, wild longish hair, possibly curly, must have a massive penis Helios - very dark, with an athletic, strong body, not as big as Araphis but more muscular than Archon, bald or with very short-cropped hair 4 MYSTICS - faces will remain obscured at all times, and also these will never be fully unclothed, body parts and flashes of the nude body underneath billowing robes will be revealed and actors should be chosen whose arms, legs, shoulder, stomach, ass, and torso will look tantalizing when fleetingly revealed. Most important, they must all have sexy hands and sexy voices, preferably a wide variety between the four of them. SCENE I (title scene) Set: Outdoors. A natural swimming hole, with a small beach at the edge. Daylight, adjust colors so everything is very warm and golden like a sun tanning product commercial. Loki and Took are wrestling in the water up to just below the waist, so that genitals are not revealed except very occasionally. Camera speed should be variable, slowing down and speeding up. This should be done smoothly so there is no obvious transition point between real-time and slo-mo. Each credit flashes during slow motion. Slow motion should occur when water is splashed, when one of the boys laughs or smiles, whenever a flash of revealed genitals occurs. Camera may perform zoomed in pans of the boys bodies but not excessively. The point of this is to get the viewer interested in the boys, and a little bit eager to catch a flash of asscrack or the top of the penis, but this isn't even softcore porn at this point. Action: Loki and Took wrestle and play in the water. Took is obviously the stronger, and tends to dunk Loki a lot. Loki is enjoying himself though, and keeps trying to dunk Took. Both characters laugh a lot showing lots of pretty teeth. Loki at some point pulls his head out of the water backwards so his hair is in his face, and both boys laugh before Took tackles Loki driving him backwards in the water. When Loki comes back up he does so face up first so the water gathers his hair back neatly. Took shakes his hair in Loki's face like a wet dog, Loki splashes Took in retaliation, evading his friend until Took lunges forward and pulls Loki into a bear hug, and tips them both over under the water. Took and Loki get into a huge slow motion splash fight, and voice-over (in Loki's voice) begin. LOKI: It was the year we were to become men. We were on the verge of becoming producers - members with something to offer. My friend Took could hit anything from a hundred steps away. With a knife, with a spear, with a rock. I saw him knock a lynx right out of a tree once with a rock. Hit it right between the eyes, it didn't even see it coming. And me, well I'm not as strong as the other boys, but I can track any animal in the jungle. And if I have my tools, I build some of the best traps our village has ever seen. That's from Araphis himself. (Action) Still slightly slo-mo, Loki and Took wade out of the water. Camera angle should be from the side or back, so that the genitals are not visible but should pan over their bodies to show off their development. LOKI (narrating): Yes, we were no longer little boys, and we knew it. Our bodies had grown strong under the hard tests our elders put us to, and we had become confident and eager to become warriors, to join the men in providing for the tribe. Other things had changed as well, though. Strange things were happening to me. (Action): The boys lay out on the grass in the sun, on their backs, side by side, sprawled out casually. Color must be very rich and warm, they are sunbathing, we should feel the sun on their skin. Pan slowly over their bodies from beside them at a low angle - we still cannot see the genitals. LOKI (narrating after a long pause): My body was changing, and often I found my mind overwhelmed with foggy feelings of strangeness and tingling in my secret parts. The parts underneath my loin cloth. (Action): Loki squirms a bit as if uncomfortable, adjusts his position so that just the edge of his penis is visible lying along the top of his leg, pointing towards his knee. As the sun continues to beat down, we hear very faintly the sound of his heartbeat which should be very subtly faded in, getting slower and slower as he relaxes in the sun. His penis starts to fill with blood, lengthening and thickening, and then eventually it rises slightly on its own and swings up to point upwards along his hipbone, then up on his bellybutton. LOKI (resumes narrating as the penis starts to move up): At strangest moments, that part - the limb that has no name, would grow larger and become hard, and point out from my body like a tail, raising itself and lowering itself as if in preparation for something I can't even imagine! For a long time I observed this strange new appendage with secret dread. I would lie or stand, feeling this pole sticking out of me as it would grow impossibly hard, and begin to throb and ache with some desire I could not name. Eventually I confessed my strange affliction to my friend Took, and he taught me the wonderful cure for this greedy new part of my body. He also taught me to realize what inspired those strange feelings, and how to coax them into full fantasies. TOOK: Did you see Archon practicing his bow today? LOKI: I saw him giving you instruction, why? TOOK: Yeah that was great (sigh), he put his hands on me. LOKI: Really? How? TOOK: Just on my shoulders. He corrected my form. (Transition to Flashback) FLASHBACK SCENE: Camera looks down from above and in front of Loki, you only see him and the grass he stands on. He holds a bow and strains to draw it. He wears a loin cloth. Archon steps into view behind him, steps close and speaks into his ear. Archon is also in a loin cloth. His chest is sweaty. and his hair is damp with sweat. ARCHON: You must keep your shoulders square, young Took. Do not bend your back, keep it straight. (Return to SCENE I) (Action) close up of Loki's hand creeping up to his hip, then slowly curling itself around his hard penis, squeezing it but not moving (Action) slow pan from above Took, along his extended leg, slowing at his balls and hard penis, which bounces above his belly. Camera position should lower, keeping a pretty close view of the penis jumping above the belly but with the new angle taking in the chest, neck, then face. Tooks head is back, atop his arm folded behind his head. Took visibly swallows. LOKI: Just your shoulders? TOOK: Well, he put his leg inside my knee to move my foot over too. (Return to FLASHBACK) (Action) This time the camera is from the side. Archon moves closer to Took, the camera can clearly see the distance between his chest and Took's back closing until his sweaty chest brushes his back. Took visibly shivers but moves back very slightly to increase the contact without being obvious. ARCHON (still murmuring in his ear): Shoulders back and down. (Action) - camera position moves down almost to the ground, showing waist down from slightly below. Archon pushes a knee between Tooks legs and forces them farther apart. Took gasps. (Back to SCENE I) (Action) - Loki is now slowly stroking his shaft. We see his face and upper body at first, his head is back on one arm, turned towards the camera, and staring, eyes dilated, the camera side arm is moving but the hand is beyond the view of the camera LOKI: Yeah, I saw that. What did his leg feel like? (Back to FLASHBACK) (Action) Close-up of Archon's leg, moving in slow motion between Took's, view is from the front, the knee bends and the much larger thigh pushes through, the top of the thigh brushes the bottom of Took's short loincloth moving it forward a bit. The rest of the leg comes through and the foot plants itself in front of Took's feet. Then it raises a bit and pushes Took's leg over farther from the other. Finally it withdraws. TOOK (voiceover the above action): It was really big and warm, and I could feel his sweat making it slide against my skin. His thigh kind of brushed against my sack. His leg is kind of hairy, it tickled a bit, and it was full of hard muscles under the skin I could feel them flexing between my legs when he forced my legs apart. ARCHON (still in Took's ear): Good boy. Now keep your shoulders square and grasp your bow in front of you (hands still hold Took's shoulders firmly, chest to back) (Action): From here on, we always hear the boys breathing harder and harder, and the camera frequently flashes to their faces or their upper bodies with their chests heaving and upper arms moving furiously (with their hands off screen), and very very quick and infrequent flashes of their hands moving over their cocks. (Action): closeup slow-motion of Archon's right hand moving along Took's right arm, closing gently around his bicep and sliding down to the elbow and then curling around his forearm and sliding down to his wrist, then replay the same motion from a camera angle that shows the arms/shoulders, then again from the right side of the two, so that we can see Took's loincloth moving outward to stand straight out from his body as his cock rises. Archon speaks during this. ARCHON: Now, keep your back straight, press it back against my chest to practice. You will only turn your shoulders to the side as you draw the bow in a smooth, circular motion, your elbow will go back behind you at shoulder-height. (Action): Close zoom of Archon's left hand falling from Took's shoulder to his waist, fingers grab onto Took's hipbone and pull his butt flush against Archon's loincloth-covered groin Loki: (gasps) Did you feel his warrior manhood?! Took: I think so, if so it was huge. I think it moved a little, too! (Action): Camera position low and to front right of characters, Took with Archon's hand still on his wrist draws the bow back (use a strong enough bow that his body will really strain to do so), twisting his body to the right, Archon's body twists right with him maintaining full body contact ARCHON (speaking into his ear): Good, Took. I can feel your body trembling to hold this position. This bow is a good strength for you, if your body is straining to hold it that is as strong as it needs to be. Your body will become stronger and harder with practice, one day you will be as strong as me, and then like Araphis. For now, I will lend you some of the strength of my body behind yours while you learn to aim. (Action) Close view of Archon's hand which tightens on Took's wrist and he pulls back a bit, camera view changes to a farther side-view so we see how this action pulls Took's body tightly against his own TOOK (panting): That was when I really felt his warrior manhood LOKI (also breathing hard): Where?! TOOK: Between my legs, and this time it definitely moved! LOKI (faintly): How? (Action - shot intersperses with increasingly frequent flashes of the boys masturbating, and also shots from ground camera front-right of the archery lesson that show Archer/Took's upper bodies, and Took's protruding loincloth and Archon's loincloth-bulge sticking out between his legs, and also a close view from the ground, behind Archon looking up inside his loincloth. His legs should be spread and the back lifted away to allow for a clean shot of his cock, but the camera should be close-in enough that this isn't obvious to the viewer. Camera shows the edge of Tooks leg, the edge of Archon's front loincloth which just barely covers his fully-lengthened cock, and his cock which rises forward, pushing the loincloth between Took's legs, the cock pressing itself directly against the inside of Took's thigh as it rises alongside it ARCHON (during previous action shot): Your arrow will go up and then down, but not as much as a spear would, so you must learn your distances. Now you are thirty paces away, so aim like this...now...release! LOKI/TOOK (both increasingly gasp and moan, building up to the peak of orgasm sounds when Archon says "release") (Action) on "release" switch to camera view from the side, thigh to head, that includes both boys lying side by side, arching their backs as they cum simultaneously, switch briefly to close-ups of faces, then switch to a side/profile view of Took's face, chest, and cock from the left side (as he strokes with his right) as he cums, with Loki doing the same in the background LOKI (narrating): It was a delicious, happy time. I was free to hear and share tales of the beautiful warriors of the village, of their bodies and the tantalizing mysteries of their secret warrior manhoods. I could lay with my friend and stroke my own manhood, releasing my own pleasure at my whim, and let the seed lay warm on my chest until the sun dried it. (Action): During narration, close views of torsos spattered with cum, limbs sprawled, heads laid back, eyes fluttering closed, cum-covered chest rising and falling with breath, gentle snores LOKI (narrating): That was my age of innocence. In those days, I found my eyes so drawn by male flesh. Even my friend Took was a delight to look at, and many times I wished to do far more than release our pleasure together - but he had eyes only for Archon. End of Scene I (Scene II to follow - comments are welcomed!)