Date: Thu, 14 Jul 2011 20:35:16 -0700 (PDT) From: Dean Pender Subject: RITUALS OF FLESH part 2 RITUALS OF FLESH a pornographic screenplay by P.T. Dean (aka prettydean82) This is a work of primarily visual fiction that is intended as an example of a much better porn film. If you are interested in what the hell I mean when I say that, you should watch the documentary "Inside Deep Throat". If you have the resources to put this into practice, I'd love to see the final product. Or even get to have a conversation with you about it during production. I'm not a film-maker, but I like good films and just about every bit of porn I'm seeing is cheap, awful crap that makes me cringe. Here's something a bit different. Note: If you like my style, find my complete novel "Symbiota Sapiens" in the sci-fi section here on nifty. You should probably search the page for it - I wrote it like four years ago or so. Any comments, email me at prettydean82@yahoo.com ------------------------------------------------------------ and now...the feature production ------------------------------------------------------------ Cast: Took - young as is legal, dark eyes/skin, somewhat rough features, very boyish, "twink" archetype, no body hair, no pubic hair, very curly hair on head Loki - young as is legal, a bit lighter than Took, delicate features, a somewhat feminine boy, also "twink" archetype, no body hair, no pubic hair, very long straight hair down at least to the waist Archon - early 20's, a very graceful athletic frame, long hair to the shoulders, delicate features, clearly a man not a boy - but only recently so, no body hair, has happy trail down to thick but small bush, think "Legolas" archetype only not blonde Araphis - early 30's, powerful lean bodybuilder/warrior body, preferably with an 8-pack that is visible from a distance, wild longish hair, possibly curly, must have a massive penis Helios - very dark, with an athletic, strong body, not as big as Araphis but more muscular than Archon, bald or with very short-cropped hair 4 MYSTICS - faces will remain obscured at all times, and also these will never be fully unclothed, body parts and flashes of the nude body underneath billowing robes will be revealed and actors should be chosen whose arms, legs, shoulder, stomach, ass, and torso will look tantalizing when fleetingly revealed. Most important, they must all have sexy hands and sexy voices, preferably a wide variety between the four of them. SCENE II: Archon and Helios face off at the edge of a clearing, Helios is coming out of the jungle and Archon stands in his way. Camera shows the two, then we switch to views of Archon scowling at Helios, bow raised threateningly. Every time Helion moves, Archon moves to counter. During narration camera pans over Archon's body. ARCHON: You are too close to our village, take yourself away! HELION: I mean no harm. I must speak with your elders, there are bad things coming, we must come together to fight these demons! ARCHON (spits in disgust): Demons! You sound like an old woman! HELION: They come in the night, they steal our youths, our warriors, all but our old men. We are left a village of women! ARCHON: And yourself among them, I say you are a weeping coward running from shadows! HELION: You don't know, you haven't seen. Take me to your elders, I beg you. ARCHON: Our elders have enough old women to fill their ears with fear, be gone or I cut you down like the pitiful dog you are. HELION (draws himself up and sticks out his chest): How dare you, you child - I am a warrior of the highest order, with business for your elders. Get out of my way! ARCHON: I will kill you where you stand. HELION (laughs): You will throw arrows at me from a distance like a naughty child. In my village, the bows are drawn by women - they are not a weapon for warriors. ARCHON (angrily drops the bow and advances, drawing a knife from his belt): I will gut you! The two charge and begin a knife-fight (I'll leave choreography up to someone who knows something about it). Loki, Took, and Apophos, and various extras gather to watch, and narration continues. LOKI: (narrating) Archon was the pride of the village, a young warrior rising up and always challenging anyone he could get away with fighting. He was strong yes, but there were stronger - no, Archon was the best because he was fast, graceful, intelligent, a master at every skill - and he was so handsome. I think there is no one in the village who was not at least a little in love with Archon. Archon eventually pins Helion with a knife to his throat. HELION: Kill me now. My village is destroyed, I have nothing. A warriors death will be a mercy after these night-scavenging thieves have taken everything with not a challenge nor a whisper. ARCHON (raises the knife for a killing blow): You are a spineless coward, I will end you. APOPHOS (steps forward): Wait, Archon. He may have important news. Bind him, let the elders judge. There is no glory in killing an enemy who begs for it. ARCHON (goes rigid when he hears Apophos' voice, and looks over his shoulder at the man, his face softening in idolatry before he immediately nods and starts binding Helios to a tree on his knees, hands behind his back. ARCHON: You saw the fight? APOPHOS (Claps an arm on Archon's shoulder): Yes, you fought very well my friend. ARCHON (Stops binding Helios to turn and ask, rather eagerly): And will you stay the night and celebrate my victory? APOPHOS: (sighs) Archon, you know my feelings on this matter. ARCHON: (pleading) But he won't be of age for another season, let me relieve your appetites for a time, give me this tonight Apophos! APOPHOS: And if I do, what will happen in another season? Will you let loose so easily? And slip again into simple blade brotherhood? No, my friend - it is better that we both wait. Me for a season, and you, for your eye to find another. ARCHON: (Slowly turns back to his task) But why, Apophos? Am I not still also slender and lithe? Is my hair not long and alluring as well? In a season he will also be a man, if my strength repulses so soon will his! APOPHOS: (Kneels next to Archon and tests a couple knots) It is not your form, my friend. You are my blade-brother, you have long been my student. I cannot see your warrior manhood as I would see another. (Looks Archon over) I know that you are beautiful, Archon. But you are not for me. (Stands) ARCHON (Shoulders sag a bit): My feelings are a nuisance to you, aren't they? I am like one of the village boys with a crush to be gently ignored. APOPHOS (Grabs Archon's forearm and tugs him to his feet): Perhaps a bit like. But only because my own attachment to you is of a different character, though just as strong. Come, blade-brother - we will celebrate your victory...with food and drink, as blade-brothers do. (The two walk away, Apophos' arm over Archon's shoulders) HELIOS: (shouts after them) And what about me!?! Am I to sit here at the edge of the forest until the sun falls, while the warriors of the village make eyes at each other over dinner!? HEEEEEY!!!! (Action): Time-lapse of Helios bound, kneeling at the base of a tree. Use various angles. Clouds moving overhead, shadows shift, evening falls. Helios' head has fallen forward, he dozes off. (Sound of a branch snapping) Helios' head jerks up, eyes looking around wildly. We hear his breathing, carefully controlled. Scan the area by panning the camera rapidly right and left, as if looking out through his eyes. HELIOS: Hello? Camera view shows Helios from the front, we see something moving in the jungle behind him. HELIOS: (breathing faster) Who's there? Another branch snaps. Helios' head wheels, trying to look behind himself at the jungle, but can't move much because of the bindings. HELIOS: Raaah! Raahh! (Shouting as if to scare away wildlife) Switch view to behind the foliage, looking out at Helios bound to the tree. We no longer hear Helios breathing, but someone else breathing much more calmly. The camera moves as if handheld, points down to show a set of feet and a bit of leg, carefully stepping forward through the foliage approaching Helios from behind. Switch view to Helios, from the side so we can't see the person emerging from the foliage. Good view of sweat running down his chest, which heaves as he looks around wildly. Switch view to front view of Helios, and we can see a pair of feet and legs, up to high thigh, approaching stealthily. LOKI (narrating): I couldn't help myself. There were so many mysteries. Things I needed to know. About the warriors, about their manhood. About what I was going to become. About what I could find if I ever had the courage to sneak into one of the warriors tents at night. Here was a warrior, beautiful and strange and mysterious, probably going to be killed in the morning, and tied up alone. Switch view to Loki's hand, slightly trembling, reaching out towards Helios' sweaty grimy back. Helios jerks and freezes motionless when the hand rests on his shoulderblade, then slowly traces the sweaty flesh inward and travels down the crease of his spine. HELIOS: Who's there? LOKI: Shhhhh. (Action): Loki viewed from the side, his loincloth jutting out in front, hair loose behind his shoulders. He leans forward very slowly, sticks out his tongue. His eyes dart around nervously and then close as his tongue makes contact with a sweat droplet on Helios' back. Helios gasps. Loki licks a stripe from Helios' lower back, up his spine to between his shoulderblades, then closes his eyes and crushes his face to Helios' back, inhaling deeply. Helios groans softly. Switch to front view slightly from the side of Helios knees to face, Helios' loin cloth rises over his increasing erection as Loki is seen to press himself against his back, hands reaching under one armpit and over the opposite shoulder to explore his chest. (Action): Ground camera looks up at Helios' rising loincloth, his balls hanging low enough to be visible under the lifted cloth. His chest and face are visible beyond the foreground. Loki looks over Helios' shoulder at his loincloth, eyes big. LOKI (hushed voice): Wow, it's so big. Can I...? (trails off, then begins again in a firm, determined voice). I'm going to touch it. LOKI (narrating): What could he say? He was at my mercy. In that moment, I could do anything, touch anything, taste whatever I wanted to taste. And I wanted everything. Side view, Loki steps out from behind Helios and kneels in front of him. Helios looks at him and his body relaxes. HELIOS: My god, you're beautiful. What are you doing sneaking around? You should be in some warrior's tent being pleasured! LOKI: I can't for another season, they won't let me. HELIOS: You're not of age. LOKI: I don't want to wait. I want to know. You will teach me. HELIOS: No, that's not my place. I'm a stranger in your village, you should be taught the ways of men by one of your own warriors. And you must wait until you are of age. LOKI: I don't care. You will teach me. HELIOS: I won't. LOKI: You can't stop me. (Action): Reaches hand under Helios' loincloth. Switch to ground camera looking up, showing Loki's hand curling around Helios' cock, which jumps. LOKI: Your warrior manhood will not refuse me. HELIOS: You must not. LOKI: Your warrior manhood wishes it. (Begins to slowly stroke Helios' cock) HELIOS: Do not do that, I must take an important message to your- (cuts off with a sharp noise when Loki leans forward and takes the head of the cock into his mouth) HELIOS (struggling to speak, a bit incoherent): ...have to warn...if they kill me for...never get to tell about...the demons... (Action): Close up of Loki's face as he gradually fits more of Helios' cock into his mouth, eventually working up to vigorously deep-throating it LOKI (narrating during the progression of the previously described action): It was the first time I tasted a warriors manhood, and it was intoxicating. The power inside that thick hot shaft shifted and pulsed under my tongue, and I found myself wanting more and more inside my mouth, pushing at the back of my throat, hard enough to force its way down my throat. The strange warrior was sweaty from lying in the sun, and everything tasted of salt and smelled of musk and soil and grass. The feeling of his cock sliding in my throat was hypnotic and soothing, and made me yearn for more intimate contact. (Action): Loki pulls off of Helios' cock with a huge gasp, and Helios' body visibly jumps HELIOS: What are you doing? LOKI: I want more. HELIOS: That's all I have. LOKI: No, I want more. I want to feel it deep inside me. HELIOS: You can't possibly- (Action): Loki very quickly spins around on his hands and knees and lifts the back of his loincloth to expose his ass HELIOS: Are you insane, boy? LOKI: I want it inside. I want to feel it. (Tries unsuccessfully to push Helios' cock inside him) HELIOS: You can't. It won't fit. LOKI: I've heard rumors- HELIOS: They are only rumors. It doesn't work that way. LOKI: But it could! HELIOS: Your hole is too small LOKI: Then it will be really tight around you, that would feel very good for you I think. And then I could feel it moving inside me. Oh! That must be right, you like that! (Squeezes Helios' hardened cock for confirmation, then pushes the head solidly against his asshole) HELIOS: Wait! You'll injure yourself if you don't slick it down! LOKI: With what? HELIOS: Look, it's going to hurt, you shouldn't do this. LOKI: I'm going to. Tell me how to not injure myself. HELIOS: (sighs) Use animal grease. There's some in the little brown bag over there where your warrior put my things. (Action): Loki goes to where Helios' stuff is and retrieves the bag, opening it and pulling out a handful of goop. He approaches Helios and hesitantly spreads it over his cock. HELIOS: You're really going to do this. (Loki doesn't answer, just turns around) HELIOS: Wait, you have to put some inside your opening too. (Loki silently does so, then lines up the head at his opening) HELIOS: You don't have to do this. LOKI: And yet - I can. Loki pushes back and gives a small cry as the head penetrates him HELIOS: Slowly! You have to be careful! If one of your warriors were teaching you this it would be much better for you! Loki arches his back and puts his head on the ground, gasping. HELIOS: Look, you should just take it out. You got to taste it, that's enough. This part really isn't going to work well this way. LOKI: I've decided, i'm going to take what I want and leave you to your fate. Stop trying to change my mind. HELIOS: My manhood will change your mind. It's too big for you. Loki slides back allowing Helios' cock to slide in a bit further. He gasps and closes his eyes HELIOS: Did I hurt you? Please, I don't want to hurt you! Loki slides a little further back taking another inch or so (Helios groans and shudders) LOKI: Do you still want me to stop? Camera close view of Loki's asshole with Helios' cock halfway inside. If possible, Loki should clench his asshole briefly around the cock in a way that is visible to the camera. HELIOS (whispers/groans): Mother! Loki slides the rest of the way onto Helios' cock and after a short pause, starts fucking himself on it. (Action Shot): Close up shot from ground between Loki's hands on the ground, up at his chest and hard penis swinging as he slams back onto Helios' cock, Helios' balls swinging under and slapping Loki's smaller balls with each thrust. Loki's cock should be dripping pre-cum all over the place - if he doesn't do it naturally have it put on him. (Action Shot): Side view from Helios' face to the bottom of Loki's ribcage. Helios' torso should be straining as he tries his best to thrust into Loki while bound on his knees with his hands behind a tree (Action Shot): Close up of Helios from face to upper-pecs, and another close-up of Loki's face from the side including his neck, shoulder, and part of his arm (Action Shot): Underside view from between Helios' legs, to show Loki's ass plunging on his cock, and Loki's precum-covered cock bouncing in front Switch rapidly between these views during narration: LOKI (narrating): It was huge. And it felt amazing inside me. Having this powerful warrior subdued, tied up and begging me to stop and then falling so unwillingly silent as his warrior manhood slid into me made me somehow more powerful. My hole around his manhood was controlling his whole body, even his mind. His decision was made to refuse, then I changed his mind completely. It was the first and only time I ever held such power. (Action): As narration nears end, Loki's panting breaths get faster and he starts to put a slight whine into them. Helios also grunts but not too loud, they are both trying to be quiet. At narration end Loki reaches climax, show a close-up of his cock spraying cum onto the grass, then immediately switch to the side view as Helios growls out a climax, Loki should pull off just in time to let Helios spray a load over him (hands-free, obviously - will require good timing and control...or maybe good trick photography)