MEMO TO NIFTY WRITERS FROM A YOUNG CRITIC
This is the first time I've ever written something like this, let alone to a bunch of writers! But me and my friends read so much of the stories on Nifty, that I just felt like I had to set the record straight...a whole lot of you guys are really off base in how you are describing the kids in your stories: From their physical descriptions to the words you have them say and especially how, when and why they are having sex. We want to help make your stories better so I'm writing this to give you our input, not to be some smart ass a-hole, OK?
We read (or at least start to read) everything that gets posted in the Young Friends, Adult Youth, and High School directories. When we find one that works...that is well written and believable, we read them out loud while we are doing it...that is so cool and I'm sure lots of the Nifty readers do that too. Unfortunately, lots more of the stories fail than pass. Thankfully the ones we think are crap usually get caught really early so we don't waste our time. But there are more than a few that start out great and then get crappy at the end for one reason or another. Those are the ones that really kill us...where we have invest our time and emotions and then get slapped. Of course, finding a truly good one makes all the searching worth while. But so many of the stories could get a passing grade if they only were written realistically.
I guess I should begin by telling you about me, so here goes. I'm 16 and I have been having sex with boys since I was 12. Some of you might say I'm no expert but fuck, I have been doing it for 4 years which is as long as it takes to get through high school or college, so I think I've earned my degree and can speak my mind and have some credibility here. Also, my favorite sex is with kids who are younger than me and I mostly go after kids who are just starting out. I love virgins and kids you don't cum at all or maybe just a little bit, but I also have lots of sex with kids my age who are pretty hairy can shoot a mouthful.
How we meet each other and figure out that we want to do sex stuff is night and day to the way about 90% of you guys write about it and it kills your stories cause its such bull shit. I will be very specific in a minute, but I want to be general and say how good your stuff could be if you just wrote them realistically. I (and when I say it I really me we...which is a regular group of 6 kids right now and there are another 4 who are less regular) think that most of you must be pretty old and maybe you've forgotten what it was like to be our age. Or maybe you never did stuff as kids and so your making it all up in your heads. But if you get it right what you write will be so much better. I mean I'm not writing this to be mean...I only want to help you so that I can read your stuff and really get into it, OK?
So here goes:
When me and my friend first did it at 12, we spent so much time making each other promise we wouldn't say anything until we trusted that we wouldn't, and when we brought other in with us it was the single most hard part. It's just so unimaginable how bad getting caught would be, and even though we may be dying to do it we rather just jack off than risk it.
Only one of us has done it with an adult and liked it...he still does and talks about why but none of us gets it, and the other one who sexed an adult just hated it. Sorry to burst your bubble guys but its just not what were looking for mostly, and a super bond would have to get created first. So, the stories about kids delivering papers or cutting lawns or whatever where the kid just hops in the sack with an adult is totally BS.
And forget about us doing THAT with an adult...no way we'd take some horse cock in the ass, so don't go there!
Also, you have to remember that when you start dry with someone and then the cum starts, its really gross OK. It's warm and salt fishy and it's from someone else's body. It takes getting used to. But you guys make it seem like kids are lining up to guzzle it like vanilla shakes! In the words of the Sopranos: "Forrrrrrr Gettttt Abouuuuuuuuttttt Ittttttt!!"
But these stories where the kid says I'm 11, 12, 13 and I'm gay and I know it is crap. We really don't know what we are except hooked on sex, but scared to death of ever getting caught. We're probably just as scared to think we really might be gay and have to sneak around our whole lives so we just don't think about I guess. It's just way to early for any of us to say one way or the other.
There's other stuff too but those are the biggest points. We really appreciate you guys writing all the stories and stuff, but please try to keep it real. I mean fantasy is cool too but like the real critics write, for it to work you have to be able to suspend your disbelief. It's just that some things aren't suspendable.
I hope this gets posted by Nifty. I thought about going into your chat room and having this conversation, but when I visited hardly any of the names I knew were there or the ones I knew were the ones who write really well...also the chat in there was not really about the writing which is odd for a writers room.
I have a secure email which is: firstname.lastname@example.org so write if you want. If I pissed you off then I'm sorry and it's not what I intended. It's just that as YOUR reader I only want you to do your best so I have more to read...OK? And THANKS!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!